Script Draft [3] Evaluation

Change the basis of the plot around:

- Make Colin look for Stephen, and can’t find him.
- Colin looks for signs Stephen is not there anymore.
- Colin then acts on it (e.g. sees bike, goes on it to find Stephen.)
 - Stephen en route through woods, cut to Trent, (we guess he is waiting for Stephen).

- Have Stephen NEARLY meets Trent.

- Let Colin intercepts him and stop him before he reaches him (this will keep the audience guessing).

Describe places more where Trent is and where Stephen is.

For 4/5 of the intro, show there may be an intersection of two people.

4/5 into it, Colin intercepts it.

 

Establish the location more, (e.g. what’s in the woods?)

Foreshadows what happens later on via what’s in the location.