Change it to be stated as a SUBURBAN area (change from urban).
Put more detail into the audio:
- What is in the suburban environment?
-Quiet, birdsong, music playing, etc.
-BUT try and have less dialogue.
Go back to your Synopsis and Script videos; relate to what they said, and put it in the script.
Convey a sense of the area, by having established shots
For example:
- A person riding a bike
- A person washing a car
- Have a wide shot as one of your first shots, to establish a sense of the surroundings.
- See Colin's front door
- See Colin walking out of the door/down the pathway
- Have him walking towards the camera (so he becomes bigger).
- Have Colin ride a bike/skateboard - creates intensity
Make it less obvious Colin is attached to Stephen.
Have different shots (e.g. shot of his feet on skateboard/feet on pedals/hands on bars)
-Don't have him saying "Stephen!"
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